“It almost doesn’t seem to make a difference,” Are you sure you don’t want to add any more qualifiers to that sentence?  One more and it can be a legit non-statement. Jace shot him an irritable look. “What is it about mundanes and their overwhelming compulsion to state the obvious?” …your entire character introduction was…

Maia goes to Jordan’s apartment to get new clothes, and though she’s upset about being in that setting again, it’s all pretty subdued.  I’m rather torn between “oh thank god, finally,” and “with any other character you’d have an entire chapter devoted to dramatic suffering and crying; did you just get tired by the time…

 Clary and Jace wake up to find that the big council meeting is abou to start, and also all the Downworlders are mysteriously missing, including Clary’s mother. They find this out by following Jia around and saying “And then?  And then?  And then?” while she doles out information with a teaspoon.  Never actually hesitating when…

Clary’s own harsh breathing was loud in her ears. She thought of the first time that Luke had ever taken her swimming, in the lake at the farm, and how she had sunk so far down into the blue-green water that the world outside had disappeared and there was only the sound of her own…

Clary wakes up back in Amatis’s house, with Jocelyn hovering over her.  Jocelyn is concerned, because Clary almost killed herself trying to heal Jace.  I’m…still confused on that entire point, though.  We’ve never seen runes taking any particular amount of effort before.  Clary has never suffered for making them, and she’s never seen anyone else…